Breathe! (Friday Fictioneers #3)

This flash fiction Friday event is both fun and a great writing exercise. A picture prompt, a 100-word story that links dozens of awesome writer bloggers! Thank you, Rochelle Wishoff-Fields!

Here’s my third attempt entitled “Breathe!

PHOTO PROMPT Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

 

BREATHE!

99 words

“No!” Mary’s cry sliced the silence of the cabin like a sharp blade.

The smeared spoon, the lighter on the table, Amy’s body slouched on the chair, the tablet idle on her lap.

Amy’s eyes cracked open. Mary braced herself for the vacant, red look of a daughter gone. It had been five years. No!

Amy stretched like a cat. “Jeez, I guess I snoozed. There was a power cut, so I heated the soup on the gas cooker.” She gave her mother a sheepish smile. “I’m a slob.”

Mary shuddered, as relief exploded in her. “Any soup left?”

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When I saw this picture, impulsively I zoomed in to discern any actual drug paraphernalia. It just took me there, hence the story.

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Comments

27 responses to “Breathe! (Friday Fictioneers #3)”

  1. Jessie Ansons Avatar

    What a clever take on the prompt. Good story!

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thank you, Jessie! I enjoyed yours as well!

  2. K.Z. Avatar

    i swear i felt her relief. 🙂 great story.

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thanks for stopping by!

  3. Sandra Avatar

    Very well done! 🙂

  4. MM Jaye Avatar
    MM Jaye

    Thank you, Sandra!

  5. aliciajamtaas Avatar

    Excellent. I had to read the story twice but that’s my problem.

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      It happens to me a lot too! Thanks!

  6. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Maria,

    What a relief that it was only soup she cooked on that burner. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Relief indeed! Thank you for commenting!

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thank you!

  7. wmqcolby Avatar

    Whew! That was close. You out me in the story and paid it off, Maria!

    Bravisimo!!!

    1. wmqcolby Avatar

      That should be “PUT me in the story” X[

      1. MM Jaye Avatar
        MM Jaye

        Ha ha! Glad you clarified because I was wondering…

  8. Ade Branwell Avatar
    Ade Branwell

    Very entertaining read! I felt Mary’s apprehension at what might have happened…

  9. Nan Falkner Avatar

    Dear MM Jaye, I could feel the relief in the Mother’s voice and her relief! I found one of my son’s passed out in the entryway one morning – and that’s the last time I ran down the stairs – he was ok and he hadn’t driven himself home, friends delivered him inebriated. Good friends – and he was 21. Oh well, he’s got a wife and kids now! Good story! Nan 🙂

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