Silence (Friday Fictioneers #4)

This flash fiction Friday event is both fun and a great writing exercise. A picture prompt, a 100-word story that links dozens of awesome writer bloggers! Thank you, Rochelle Wishoff-Fields!

Here’s my fourth attempt entitled “Silence”.

PHOTO PROMPT Copyright – Ted Strutz

 

SILENCE

99 words

The whirring in my mouth was goose-flesh inducing, but I had already tucked it away in the past. I was already on the docked ferry, its yawning mouth mimicking my own. I was already alone, far from the crying, whining, screaming—all that ruckus that made the noise in my cavity a welcome respite.

By the time Gus found out I was missing, I’d be far away. Huddled in a cozy, silent room.

Let Gus handle the ruckus for the rest of the week. Four days of peace was all I wanted. I deserved as much.

Then I’d return.

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That story draws from personal need. Almost always when I ride the train to work, I think of going down to the terminal station at the port of Piraeus and board any outbound ship. Just be left to my own devices for a few days. Not talk to a living soul. Just silence.

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Comments

30 responses to “Silence (Friday Fictioneers #4)”

  1. Nicholas C. Rossis Avatar

    Lol – very personal, indeed, you poor thing! 🙂
    I loved the “goose-flesh inducing” line – excellent!

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thanks, Nicholas! I knew you’d understand… You’ll understand even more when it’s not a puppy who has to listen to your heartbeat to calm down 🙂

      1. Nicholas C. Rossis Avatar

        Lol – if authoring doesn’t work out for you (not a chance, of course), you can always make a living out of giving family planning speeches… 😀

  2. lingeringvisions by Dawn Avatar

    Some great phrases here. My cavity a welcome respite being my favorite.

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thank you so much!

  3. Sandra Avatar

    Some really effective comparisons here. Nice work.

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thank you, Sandra! I always enjoy your contributions!

  4. FabricatingFiction Avatar

    I love the descriptions you use.

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thanks for taking the time to comment!

  5. rochellewisoff Avatar

    Dear Maria,

    I know the feeling. When I retire next year I’m going to become a hermit and speak only to people I choose.

    Nice one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      After years of hard work, one deserves to live life as she pleases. Hope you get to do whatever you feel will make you happier! Thanks for stopping by, Rochelle!

  6. dmmacilroy Avatar

    Dear Maria,

    You should answer those impulses. I like how your personal life informed this story and made it more real. Lovely writing.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thank you, Doug, for being ever so supportive!

  7. Horus Avatar

    Reminded me of my impromptu bus trips to nowhere! 🙂

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Ahh! Impromptu trips. That would be “the shortest joke ever” where I’m concerned 🙂

      1. Horus Avatar

        🙂 still would be worth a try

  8. wmqcolby Avatar

    Yeah, I usually hide when I go to work. I don’t necessarily attend parties or anything like that unless I feel like it.

    Keep on writing these “attempts,” as you call them, of yours!

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      Thanks for the vote of confidence!

  9. patriciaruthsusan Avatar

    Maria, I think most of us feel the need to get away to a place of peace now and again. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

  10. patrickprinsloo Avatar

    Boats are great places to escape too (trains, also).

    1. MM Jaye Avatar
      MM Jaye

      True, but apart from guts it takes an amount of self-centredness that I lack. Thanks for stopping by!

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